WEEK 6
The
most basic definition of 9/11 would be; “On September 11, 2001, 19 militants
associated with the Islamic extremist group al-Qaeda hijacked four airliners
and carried out suicide attacks against targets in the United States. Two of
the planes were flown into the towers of the World Trade Center in New York
City, a third plane hit the Pentagon just outside Washington, D.C., and the
fourth plane crashed in a field in Pennsylvania.”(History.com) these planes
were all hijacked my members of the extremist militant Islamic group known as Al
Qaeda. Since we have the largest military in the world, Al Qaeda didn’t have
the power to take our troops down in large quantities, instead they attacked a
national landmark to provoke widespread fear and confusion to untimely spread
their voices and opinions on how our lives should be lived.
Many
people, especially republicans want to respond to this violence with more
violence. Our own people have crossed over and joined such terrorist
groups like ISIS, as it is being glorified in many recruiting videos along with
propaganda against the U.S government, mixed with angst and hatred for their
own homeland; it’s very easy to see how this is quite possible. Right Wingers
would say that we actually have not done enough to keep this country safe and
must do more, even if that means sacrificing certain things. "It's fair to say that we face
more threats, coming at us from more places, involving more individuals than we
have at any time since 9/11," (CNN) These such situations would terrify
just about anyone. Republicans would argue that while we are safe(ish) today,
more could be done if everyone had a gun and the upmost ability to defend
themselves.
9/11 was a worldwide tragedy, many,
many lives were lost and it affected just about every Americans life on that
day. Everyone knows someone who was affected by that day. We as a country did
not overreact to 9/11. As a government however we did. Islamophobia is very
present today and it’s an incredible problem. “We must keep Al Qaeda in perspective. It’s a small
band of fanatics who have alienated the vast majority of Muslims.” (Yale
Global) When extremists
only make up an incredibly small population of Muslims. We are safer today, of
course we are safe our military is incredibly vast and we have so many
precautions set in place now. No one is “winning” the War on Terror, and no one
is losing either. It is just draining for both sides physically and mentally,
and it needs to stop. I know world peace is a long shot, but I feel as if we
would just learn to understand each other in other ways instead of using
violence, things could get solved. Though neither side is willing to negotiate
or listen to reason, so as of right now we are at a standstill.
Bridget,
ReplyDeleteThis post is ok... it seems a bit rushed and scrambled. Why the highlighted text? Think about your design. Maybe you could have white text and keep your darker background. Also, there are not images to accompany this post. Be sure to have at least three.
I think that I understand your thesis, but it is not entirely clear here. Is your thesis something like: The US did not overreact to 9/11 militarily, but the Islamophobia that has occurred is a large problem within the country.
That seems to be the general arguement that you craft throughout your article. But that conclusion was drawn from the bits and pieces that you've scattered about.
Each paragraph here is a good start - a rough draft. What is missing is a little organization and all the facts. Where are they facts? You use a good quote from CNN, which can be considered a fact that backs up your point, but who stated that on CNN? Is that a CNN editorial, or was there a commentator or author?
This post is good, but it feels like a rough draft. What cold, hard facts would support your claim about Islamophobia? You have a great thesis with this angle, it just needs to be the focal point of the article and you need to have facts to back this up. Maybe you could mention recent attacks on the Muslim community or cite specific examples from the news where Islam (in general) is being criticized.
Think of how you can strengthen this with your research and organize it a little better - around your thesis.
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